SPORTSWEEK 16TH MARCH

SPORTSWEEK 
Well done again, this is a very professional programme. If we keep tweaking various aspects we will soon have the most polished student programme anywhere. Well done. Cara, you do a really good job at presenting.

HEADLINES AND TITLES

The headlines have a better look to them now - Chris' idea for straps is a good one, and you have grabbed the idea and understood how to be informative and light-hearted. That's the whole idea - get the puns in, they work.

The titles now look like titles - I wonder if we could add still more colour into them just to make them a little artier. They are still very dark on the basketball and I wonder if they can be lightened up? Changing the order of the pictures to end with the goal shot, and using the 'clunk' is a perfect punctuation to go in to the studio. But the previous one of the player holding the ball I'm not sure works now. Look at it again and see what you think.

The back drop for the studio is so much better - having the monitor on the angle adds more depth to the shot.

But in our links folks, don't use nicknames or ground names, before we hear the team name for real. Not everyone will know who the Seagulls, the Saints, the Minstermen or in this case 'fans at the Testwood stadium' are - I didn't and I'm supposed to know about these things. Don't expect people to know all the non league grounds.

TOTTON

Mikey you have a good clear voice, but be careful not to over write - if you have too many words in your package then it will grate with the viewer and they will not be able to take in the pictures. This is more the case in your second package (Winchester), and this one breathes a little better - compare the two.

At the opening if we are going to talk about Michael Gosney (sp?) then let's see him. Also you say "rumoured to be being monitored"...is that English - sounds ugly to me. What's great though is the fact that you know that information and you've drawn it to our attention. Good stuff.

You do let it breath nicely after the 1-nil goal, but if it was you who was shooting it, it was the perfect opportunity for you to zoom in on the goalscorer to see him celebrate in a tight shot.

For the second goal I like the way you have used the spoof comms - it's a good bit of commentary - and then paused for the PA announcer - the only problem is the commentary would have carried on if he were commentating at the time. To have a gap at the end merely reinforces the fact it was dubbed on after.

For four nil - on which there is neither v/o or comms (somewhat strange)  - again it is the perfect opportunity to zoom in after the goal - it gives you a different sized shot and it's as good as a cutaway. Gareth is beginning to master that now.

It was a great outline - good information, good line. Well done, the perfect way to end the package.

BASINGSTOKE

Link is fine here, but do football teams "face off" against each other - I think that's a hockey term.

I have spoken to you Gareth about this piece and most of it is excellent - the camera work is very good, and the tips I have given you are really paying off. I see you have changed some things since our chat (was that only for the news package) but what about the changes to the opening line, which doesn't make sense?

Be careful that your v/o words do not replicate what has been said in the spoof comms and vice versa and that you do not say what is going to happen, before it actually does. It's too much of a signpost.

Everyone should look at the way this package has been shot and the techniques Gareth has used here. He has done really well.

STUDIO BRIEFING

A very good idea to do this, but try and remember most of what you are going to say. It is all very well to have notes on the table, but DON'T turn the page over halfway through the interview! Write it on TWO pieces of paper!

HANDOVER

The idea to use a three shot is great here for the handover, but it looks horrid. I applaud the attempt, but the green screen makes it look dreadful.

AMY

It's a great addition to have you there, and makes us look like we've got a huge sports team when we haven't really. After seeing you in vision for about 5/6 seconds we need to take the table full frame - i.e. run it as a VT and we'll take that as it is too small on the green screen behind you. We should try and highlight our teams as well in a different colour.
We say Totton are 5 points clear at the top when the gap on the graphic says they have 73 points and Sholing I think it is have 71.....
You are getting better and better at this - I think you meant to say at the end "so plenty of potential for our non-league CLUBS" and not "non-league GAMES" at the end. If you make a mistake, don't be afraid to correct yourself, but you're looking more and more comfortable up there.

Cara make sure you react when Amy hands back, she's not an alien who should be ignored!

WINCHESTER CITY

I don't think we needed the kick off shot. I think we have to steer away from handshakes and kick offs unless totally necessary.

I think we also needed to see the sending off tackle again at the top of the piece - it happens quite quickly so help out the viewer. Go tackle in real time, the red card, and then a replay.

While you have really got the hang of what to do after a goal is scored, or after an incident, I think the cutaway after the equalising goal is a little sharp. Be careful not to be too quick.

As for the penalties, make sure you get something as a cutaway after each one, if you only have one camera. It works after the missed penalty because you follow the player who has missed, but not later when it's effectively a jump cut; and you repeat that error with other penalties.

Also after that first penalty leave the sound long to get the crowd reaction underneath the cutaway you use. If you don't, you know it's an edit. If you keep the sound going, then it hides the edit.

WINCHESTER UNI

Technical trouble I presume has meant that the link to Winchester has disappeared. Where is it? Going from Winchester City and then Winchester makes it confusing. Who is who? Don't confuse the viewer.

As for the package, as I referred to it earlier - it is very wordy. There are some good snippets of informaton but just too many words.

KARATE CLUB

CARA if you lost autocue at the top of the karate link, then this is an example to everyone of how to cover yourself and to use your hard copy of a script - that's why we always need scripts in thje studio. It seems you had lost autocue at the beginning and then it arrived half way through. It was brilliantly handled - very well done. The only thing is, maybe in your nervousness that it wasn't there, you start swinging your chair. One minor point to a very well handled technical difficulty.

PKG
This is not a bad effort and you try and bring us a little bit of an understanding about another sport that isn't mainstream. I think there is merit in having a little piece on "forgotten sports" each week, as it adds variety to the show.